eh, it's okay I guess
This didn't do too much for me, to be honest. I think the intro was the best part but I don't think the song itself lived up to what the intro was preparing me for.
I think that there is talent to be seen here, but I think you should focus more on the song writing then just playing music. I personally find half the fun of playing music is actually writing the music and preparing it to be as good as it can be. Just my thoughts.